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Some people belive that robots are very important to human’s future development, whilw others believe they are dangerous and negatively affect society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is beyond qesution that the
robots
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 are become a widely discussed isuue , there is no doubt that the
robots
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 going to be in the near future ,
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 many people believe that the
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 are important and a must for the human life in the future , a proportion of people hold the view that the
robots
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 are dangerous and have a negative impact on the society. I assume that
robots
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sholud
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should
 be there in the future. The following
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paragraphs
 will discuss both sides and explain my
postion
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position
.
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 with , the advantages of
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 are numerous ,
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 as
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make
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the
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daily life
more easy
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in addition
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help
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the
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compaines
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companies
 and
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employees in
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their
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jop
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jobs
 and finsh fastly ,
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robots
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 keep your house clean and save and help you with
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household tasks
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 , there are reasonable concerns , like
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the
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 can do any harmful action , and
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cause a lot
 of
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damage
 to the person. Another point to consider is
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the
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robots
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 may
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 of workers in the whole world
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additionly
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,
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robots
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 do not have any
humans
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human
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fealings
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feelings
, like , love , friendship and mercy.
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 , the cost of buying a robot may be expensive. In
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conclusion
, though opinions may vary , from my
perspecttive
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perspective
, I personally tend to believe that the
robots
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 are going to be very important to
development of the
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 society and different
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. As it offers , easy life , short time to do the tasks , no effort at all ,
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help
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 you at home.
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 , it is reasonable to support
this
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 point of view.

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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly states both views and your opinion. It should map out the main points you will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to help your paragraphs flow better.
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Use clearer examples. Try to give specific real-world examples of how robots help or harm society.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Mistakes can confuse readers and weaken your argument.
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Expand on your ideas more. Provide more detail on how robots help or hurt society.
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You presented both views of the issue, which shows good understanding of the topic.
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Your conclusion clearly states your opinion about robots and their importance to society.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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