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The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK city between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. this is the topic

The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK city between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. this is the topic
The bar chart illustrates the number of
jobs
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 in various tourism-related sectors in a UK city from 1989 to 2009, measured at five-year intervals.
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, employment in food services and accommodation consistently accounted for the highest number of
jobs
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 throughout the period.
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 some sectors
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such
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, such
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 as sports and
leisure
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leisure,
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 showed gradual growth, others
like
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, like
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travel
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agencies
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agencies,
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 experienced a decline after peaking in the late 1990s. In 1989, restaurants and food chains employed approximately 1,100 people, slightly more than the hotel sector, which had around 1,050
jobs
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. Entertainment and leisure services followed closely,
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travel
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agencies
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 and sports facilities had relatively fewer positions, with just under 900 and 800
jobs
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, respectively. By 1994, the food and accommodation sectors saw a modest increase, with food-related
jobs
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 reaching 1,300.
Travel
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agencies
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 experienced a notable rise, peaking at about 1,100
jobs
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 in 1999, the same year restaurants
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 reached a high of 1,400 positions.
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, employment in
travel
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agencies
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then
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 declined sharply, dropping to below 800 by 2009. Sports and leisure
jobs
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 grew steadily over the years, climbing from around 700 in 1994 to over 1,000 in 2009. Meanwhile, the hotel industry remained relatively stable, with minor fluctuations, ending the period with just over 1,000
jobs
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jobs, travel, agencies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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