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Some people think thats it's a good idea to socialise with work colleages during evenings and weekend. Other people, think it's important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Discussion on a topic related to having a balance between social
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 and private
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 is an edge topic which originates from the mindset that comes from a cooperative way to being successful and happy , or to combat the social
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 and have own privacy to separate lines and borders , even in the workplace vs personal
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 . Some people have supposed that it is an effective way to communicate at different levels of communication . As it is well understood, communication has different layers and levels to touch intimacy , happiness and sharing knowledge in a secure environment , even among rivals .
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 many discussion clubs
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 it has provided a coffee break to socialise after the specialists have criticised each other .Many strong friendships could be built in
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 a space , as I have experienced during many meetings and found a colleague as a friend to communicate and share feelings and personal aspects of my
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some jobs and duties need to keep working
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 completely separate from social
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, because the type of job is sensitive ,even for the best colleagues or sometimes some economic purposes have been involved, every specialist must follow strickly steps to teach other colleagues that competition is a really big matter in our character as humans. It is inevitable that everybody has their own lines for being selfish;
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 mindset is a topic from some ideologies toward the universe and humans,so these are reasons that could be a cause of chaos or unwanted events in our relationship .It might be
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 subconscious desire that everybody wants to draw themselves
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 attractive and more important than others .As we know, it might be building progress for society
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 , I couldn't reach to definite answer to these matters , and it would be different occasionally in one situation from another . Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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You provided an interesting perspective on workplace relationships.
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Some examples were personal and relatable, which is good for engaging the reader.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • team cohesion
  • work-life balance
  • professional boundaries
  • foster
  • supportive work environment
  • job satisfaction
  • productivity
  • diversity in social interactions
  • prevent burnout
  • conflicts of interest
  • favoritism
  • setting clear boundaries
  • enhance communication
  • invasive stress
  • maintain diversity
  • prevent burnout
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