Some people think that watching TV is bad for children do you agree or disagree.

Some people think that watching
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is bad for
children
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. I agree with
this
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idea. Watching
TV
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too much can waste
children
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’s
time
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and teach them bad things.
First,
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children
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who watch a lot of
TV
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have less
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to do important activities. They do not study or play outside enough.
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, some
children
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watch cartoons for four or five hours every day.
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is a waste of
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, and later they do not have the power to study or learning new things, and when
children
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do not study well, their school grades become
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poor
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.
Second,
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many
TV
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programs show violence and bad behaviour. They may copy what they see
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TV
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without knowing it is wrong.
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, kill with a knife, they may take that knife from their kitchen and they do not know it is the wrong thing.
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sitting for a long
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while
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watching
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is not good for
children
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’s health.
Children
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should be active and move their bodies to
keep
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stay
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healthy and fit. Watching
TV
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for a long
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causes a lot of bad things , the important
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is that and makes people overweight and lazy, and may cause a problem health problems
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, and
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children
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feelchildren
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feel
tired. They should be parents to control what their
children
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watch and put limits on
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and must impose
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limits on
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sports, and spend less
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in front of screens. In conclusion, watching too much
TV
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is bad for
children
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. Parents should teach their
children
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to avoid
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and spend
time
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doing other activities as reading books, and studying to
better
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improve their
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life
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and
good
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good,
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healthy body.

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task achievement
Your essay should explain each main point clearly. Try to add more details or example sentences.
coherence
Use linking words like 'first', 'second', 'in conclusion' to help the reader see your ideas clearly.
coherence
Check your sentences for grammar mistakes and make sure you give complete sentences.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion in your introduction and conclusion.
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Your ideas are good and support your opinion that TV is bad for children.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Negative effects
  • Physical health
  • Mental health
  • Excessive
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Obesity
  • Attention span
  • Cognitive development
  • Inappropriate
  • Violence
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Educational
  • Informative
  • Knowledge
  • Learning abilities
  • Diverse cultures
  • Languages
  • Experiences
  • Values
  • Life lessons
  • Bonding
  • Moderation
  • Parental guidance
  • Entertainment benefits
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