Research so that over eating is as harmful to peoples health has smoking there for the advertisements of certain food products should be banned to what extend do you agree or disagree

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researches
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have
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shown that both overeating and smoking can lead to various significant
health
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issues
and
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therefore
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therefore,
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the publicity of these harmful products should be banned. I strongly agree with
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in
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essay
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I will express my views about
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. Young generations and
childrens
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children
are the main source of excess eating
and
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parents are
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reason
of
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this
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. With the growing
stage
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they allow
child
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children
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to eat everything in terms of snacks, noodles,
coldrinks
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cold drinks
,
fastfood
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fast food
and oily things
which
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further
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influence
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the overeating and obesity causes.
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, media is
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working to promote these
kindsof
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kinds of
things
especially
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, especially
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KFC,
Mcdonalds
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McDonald's
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, Pepsi and
tother
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others
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which
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create
the
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negative impact on
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children
and
in
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a result
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result
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they resist
thier
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their
parents
to
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buy. In terms of
health
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, it can lead to different issues like high
cholestrol
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cholesterol
, heart disease, excess
of
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uric acid and more
abdomen
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problems. If I talk about
my self
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myself
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via
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by
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using oily
food
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food,
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I am experiencing
a
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severe breathing issues with joint pain.
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,
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, smoking is injurious to
health
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but
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upcoming generations are
utilizing
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this
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in terms of vape,
flavored
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smoke and with different brands
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causes
the pressure on
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pressure on the
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lungs and later turns it
to
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into
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lungs
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lung
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cancer.
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, one of my friends is taking
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cigarettes
daily 3 times and
now a days
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nowadays
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he is
hospitalized
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hospitalised
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and fighting with a face cancer.
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, advertising campaigns are working here in a positive manner by running different ads on
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the news
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channel
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channels
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to avoid smoking.
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, many countries are
workinh
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working
on promoting the positive
adverstisements
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advertisements
by running hygienic ads, gyming, and swimming marketing for better
health
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, helping families and young individuals to
understamd
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understand
about
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all the crucial factors and
impact
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their impact
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on their lifestyle. In conclusion, a balanced and strict approach with proper rules and regulations
are
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is
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required
on
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for
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the
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food
advertisement
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advertisements
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. Focusing on calories with necessary grooming may help
the
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people to eat healthy
,
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and live
happy
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happily
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overeating
  • smoking
  • health problems
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • advertisements
  • food products
  • banned
  • influence
  • children
  • healthy options
  • eating habits
  • laws
  • educate
  • balanced approach
  • regulations
  • labels
  • informed choices
  • public health
  • serious issue
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