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In the future, all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantagse?

There is no denying the fact that charities have helped to reduce
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poverty. Some of them
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 think they should extend their limits worldwide,
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 others argue that they are only responsible for their community. I think
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 should only attend
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 countries
This
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 I will explain my opinion on
this
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 topic. On the one hand, a portion of the human beings believe that
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 establishments should consider helping all people in any country; they see that humans , no matter where they are from, must help them
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 matter what
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 humanity.
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, the CHR
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 in the USA has shown its recent research, which is the famous work they did, giving money to the UK homeless , the majority of contributions were from outside
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 itself. I do not agree with
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, another portion thinks that it should help only their citizens,
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 the expenses and the payroll for the employees, so giving help to someone inside the country is less costly, compared to the outside.
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, the charities in KSA that help outside countries
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 pay more than they pay in SaudiArabia. I totally agree with
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 statement. In conclusion, there is no easy way to answer
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that nations should be held accountable only for their citizens

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Make sure to clearly state your view in the introduction.
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Use clearer examples and explain them in more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
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Add more specific examples to support each point you make.
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You have presented both sides of the argument.
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Your conclusions summarize your argument well.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • human error
  • autonomous vehicles
  • efficient traffic flow
  • congestion
  • real-time communication
  • accessibility
  • elderly and disabled individuals
  • mental well-being
  • productivity
  • profession drivers
  • cybersecurity
  • hacking
  • implementation costs
  • ethical dilemmas
  • decision-making algorithms
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