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Many students find it harder to study when they are at university or college than when they were at school. Why is this? What can be done to solve the problem?

The notion of different difficulties between university, college and school is not new, but only recently has it been discussed to a larger extent. In
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, at university and college, they are often left to manage their academic responsibilities on their own and
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. It leads to stress and difficult to adapt to
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. Another probable contributing factor is that the knowledge students are required to learn in higher education is not only more extensive but
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, given that timely solutions are implemented, the negative influences will be reduced.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university
  • college
  • students
  • school
  • study
  • workload
  • freedom
  • routine
  • home
  • distractions
  • pressure
  • success
  • social life
  • stress
  • focus
  • skills
  • understanding
  • assignments
  • difficulties
  • balance
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