Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
people
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think that
governments
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should
cost
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spend
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more money
in
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on
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railways
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than
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roads
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on roads
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.In my opinion, that's right,but do not ignore roadways more.The use of
roads
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is
also
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different from
railway
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railways
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, and
railways
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and
roads
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can complement each other. For developing countries,built
railways
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bring workers
for
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from
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local
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the local
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,and
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area,and
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they add additional income.After the
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railways
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railway
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operation,it brings more visitors and money for
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the local
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local
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locals
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.Undeniably,the
railways
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are the most cost-effective in so much public transportation.
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,many
people
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would like to choose
train
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a train
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for travel. And local
governments
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should develop more projects for travel,so
convenience
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apply
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that stimulates more tourist consumption.For traveling countries,there are many trains for
people
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who
can
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apply
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enjoy the scenery during
journey
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their journey
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.
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,the
railways
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between Russia and China built in
forest
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the forest
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,
people
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will see the different scenery
with
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of
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two
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the two
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countries when the trains
passing
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pass
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by.
Although
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there are many advantages of
railways
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,it is
also
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built
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apply
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difficult
and
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to build and
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needs
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takes
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a long time.But
roads
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are built
easier
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more easily
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and faster,compared with
railways
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. The advantage of
roads
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was short-distance transportation.
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,if local
people
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need to transport some chemical liquid for industry in a
neighboring
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neighbouring
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city,the
roads
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was
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were
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the best
chosen
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choice
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to maintain their safety.
Besides
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,
governments
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should think
further
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about all kinds of
situation
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situations
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of
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in
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local
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their local
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.
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area.
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In Germany,almost every person has an average of two cars, and they can drive faster than
train
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a train
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without limited speed on their
roads
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.
That is
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because the
roads
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more
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are more
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developed than
railways
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in Germany. All in all,
although
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the
railways
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have more advantages than
roads
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,
governments
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should consider the actual local situation and decide if they should spend more money on
railways
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or not,later.

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task achievement
Strengthen your introduction by clearly stating your opinion and outlining the main points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to help guide the reader through your ideas.
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Provide more specific examples to illustrate your points better, making them more relevant to the argument.
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You provide a balanced view by discussing both railways and roads, which is positive.
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You mention specific examples, like the train between Russia and China, which adds interest.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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