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The bar graph below depicts the number of tea and coffee imported by four diffent countries in tonnes

The bar graph below depicts the number of tea and coffee imported by four diffent countries in tonnes
The bar chart illustrates the quantities, in
tonnes
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, of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 imported by
Canada
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, the United Kingdom, the United States and Germany.
Overall
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,
tea
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imports
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 exceed
coffee
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imports
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 in all countries except
Canada
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, where
coffee
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imports
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 are higher. Notably, the UK leads in
tea
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imports
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 yet records the lowest
coffee
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 intake among the four. In terms of
coffee
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, Germany imported the greatest volume at approximately
45 000
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45,000
tonnes
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, marginally outpacing both
Canada
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 and the USA, each at around
40 000
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40,000
tonnes
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.
By contrast
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, the UK’s
coffee
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imports
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 were substantially lower, at only about
20 000
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20,000
tonnes
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.
Tea
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imports
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 reveal a very different hierarchy. The UK topped the chart, importing roughly
160 000
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160,000
tonnes
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, followed by the USA with about
115 000
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115,000
tonnes
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. Germany’s
tea
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 purchases were considerably smaller, at around
40 000
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40,000
tonnes
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,
while
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Canada
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 imported the least, at approximately
20 000
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20,000
tonnes
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. These figures underscore the predominance of
tea
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 over
coffee
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 across most markets,
as well as
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 the UK’s particularly strong preference for
tea
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, tea, coffee, canada, imports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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