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Some people say that what individuals do to protect the environment cannot make difference, others say that individuals can protect the environment. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

In today`s fast-paced world, everyone
say
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says
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 that a
person
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 alone cannot change the
climate
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 condition,
while
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other
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others
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 argue that a single
person
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 can change the
environment
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. In my opinion, an individual can change the
climate
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 condition by planting many
trees
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, and
also
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 can encourage other
people
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 to do so,
while
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 if someone
spread
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spreads
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 the
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pollution
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pollution,
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 it
is
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affects the
enviornment nagetively
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environment negatively
.
To begin
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 with, some
people
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 think that they cannot protect the
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earth
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Earth
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. If they control their own waste and
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pollution
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pollution,
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 they still can help the
environment
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.
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, they can donate some money to someone who is dedicated to
save
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saving
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 the
climate
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, they
still can
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can still
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 make their move with less
efforts
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effort
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 and time to save the
earth
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 from
the
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apply
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global warming.
For example
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, there was an article in the Times of India which says
people
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 believe they cannot save the
climate
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 but they can help those
peope
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people
 who
seeking
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are seeking
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for
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apply
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fund
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funds
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 to save the
earth
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.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 think that they can save the
earth
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 from
the
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apply
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threat
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threats
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such
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 as
the
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acid rain and
the
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global warming.
As a result
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, some
people
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 are looking to plant many
trees
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 to reduce the
caron
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carbon
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 dioxide percentage
from
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in
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 the
climate
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, which makes clean air.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 are actively posting on social media to save the
environment
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, which
encourage
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encourages
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 others to plant more
trees
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.
This
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 simple step from a
person
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 can reduce
pollution
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 and make other
people
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awere
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aware
 about the importance of planting
trees
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.
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, there was
a
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research done by Western Sydney University which mentioned a
sigle
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single
person
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 can make
huge
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a huge
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 impact, if they decide to
planting
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plant
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trees
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 and motivate others. In conclusion,
people
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 can reduce their waste and control their own
pollution
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, if they think they cannot make any impact on the
environment
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,
while
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 in my
veiw
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view
, an
indivdual
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individual
 can make
large
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a large
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 impact if they
planting
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plant
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 more
trees
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 and motivate other
people
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 to do
same
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the same
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.

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grammar
Make sure to use clear and correct grammar in your sentences. This helps your ideas flow better.
development
Try to develop your points more fully. Explain how actions impact the environment with more detail.
cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more clearly with transition words like 'firstly', 'in addition', or 'however'.
content
Your main ideas are clear and you provide reasons for both sides of the argument.
structure
You attempt to conclude your essay by summarizing your view at the end, which helps provide closure.
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