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Some people believe that children should be given homework every day, while others think that it is not necessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people believe that
children
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 should be given
homework
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 every
day
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, but others think it is not very important and that
children
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 should have more free time. I personally agree with the second view because
children
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 should have more freedom, and
homework
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 should be assigned
at the end
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 of the week, not every
day
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. Doing
homework
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 every
day
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 it is
help
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helps
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 the
children
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 to keep
the
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their
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mind
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minds
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 open.
Moreover
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,
homework
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help
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helps
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 the
children
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 to be
a
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apply
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smarter and genius.
Also
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,
homework
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 helps
children
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 to
successful
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be successful
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 in their
life
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lives
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.
In addition
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, parents can give easy
homework
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 like reading books, solving math problems, and writing short
essay
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essays
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this
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; this
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 way,
can
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they can
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provide
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improve
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 their English.
Homework
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 helps
children
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 do well in school and talk with teachers. Others think it’s not very important to
put
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do
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homework
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 every
day
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.
Homework
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 every
day
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they
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apply
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helps
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children
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children,
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put
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but
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 if they put
every
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in every
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day
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day,
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 it
cause
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causes
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 a lot of
problem
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problems
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 for
children
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.
Furthermore
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,
children
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 may
sitting
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sit
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 alone if they do
homework
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day
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, become lazy and crazy,
also
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 maybe they cannot understand all
this
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homework
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 every
day
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Punctuation problem
; the
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the
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their
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mind
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minds
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 should be
relax
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relaxed
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 to understand all of
these
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this
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. Some individuals think they should put limits
for
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on
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home work
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homework
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 and schedule assignments for
end
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the end
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 of the week
and
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apply
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to
be
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make
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 the
children
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 happy.
Moreover
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, the
children
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 should have more freedom to listen
for
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to
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their Parents
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Parents
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Parents'
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homework
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 and to
getting
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get
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 high grades in
school
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school,
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 they should have free time In conclusion, giving
homework
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 every
day
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 is not a good idea because it can make
children
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 feel stressed and unhappy. In my opinion, students should have more free time to spend with friends, and
homework
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 should be assigned only
at the end
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 of the week.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to help the reader follow your ideas.
task achievement
Try to give more specific examples to support your points about homework.
positive
The essay expresses a clear opinion about homework.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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