The bar graph below depicts the number of tea and coffee imported by four diffent countries in tonnes.

The bar graph below depicts the number of tea and coffee imported by four diffent countries in tonnes.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar graph below depicts the number of tea and coffee imported by four diffent countries in tonnes.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of
tea
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and
coffee
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imported in
Canada
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,
United
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the United
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State
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States
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,
United
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the United
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Kingdom and Germany. Units are measured in tonnes.
Overall
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, the UK has the highest quantities of
tea
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shipped in among the four
countries
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countries,
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while
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,
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apply
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the least of
tea
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imported
are
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is
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in
Canada
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and
US
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the US
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with
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, with
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the same number.
However
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,
Germant
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Germany
was the highest in rank to bring in
coffee
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and lowest was in Britain, and
American
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America
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and
Canada
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had almost the same figure of
coffee
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buy
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bought
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from abroad.
Tea
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was the most popular beverage
bring
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brought
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from abroad in the United Kingdom
with
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, with
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80,000 and Germany was the next country to import double tonnes of the
Canada
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and America
that
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, that
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has the same 20,000
of
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tonnes of
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tea
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shipped in. Germany imported the largest quantities of
coffee
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of about 50,000
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while
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, while
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the British people
bring
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brought
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in the lowest number of
coffee
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at around 30,000. There was relatively the same number of
coffee
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imported in
Canada
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and
United
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the United
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State
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States
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( almost 40,000 and 40,000
)
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,
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respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, canada with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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