IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

1.You would like to invite your friend from abroad to a public event in your country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter odescribe the public event oexplain why you think he/she would like the event owrite how you can help your friend with accommodation

Dear Ranny, I hope
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 letter finds you well and in the best spirits. I am writing
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 letter to invite you to attend a public event which will take place next month. The event that we are planning to organise is called Traditional Roots. The aim of
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 event is to connect
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 generation towards their cultural roots, and will provide them
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 information via
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 presentation. As you have a keen interest in traditional and historical objects,
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you will get an opportunity to know more about the past events.
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, there will be some workshops, where artisan and school students show their creativity for public engagement. I
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 you since childhood. You do not need to book your hotel because you will stay at my home. It will be a great chance for us to refresh our memories
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. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Sam.

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Add a bit more detail about the event to engage your friend better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer transitions between ideas to improve flow.
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Ensure each paragraph focuses on one idea for better clarity.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and warm, which is good for inviting a friend.
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You provided a personal touch by offering your home for accommodation, which is welcoming.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public event
  • cultural festival
  • annual
  • spectacular
  • performance
  • exhibition
  • recurring event
  • one-time occasion
  • attraction
  • highlight
  • interest
  • hobby
  • unique experience
  • local culture
  • accommodation
  • stay
  • recommend
  • bookings
  • transportation
  • guided tour
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