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Band 3.5

Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

Idle
time
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 for living on the Earth has been always a topic of discussion for a long
time
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. Some
individual
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individuals
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 believe that
current
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the current
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time
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 is the most suitable
time
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 for living. I
am
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partially disagree with the statement. I will discuss my opinion in
this
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 essay and will describe the
preferrable
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time
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 for living. Some masses made their opinion
base
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 on
few
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a few
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 circumstances.
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, in
current
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the current
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time
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, basic
necessity
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necessities
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things
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are easily available to everyone.
This
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 view exists as many people can afford food, clothes and
house
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a house
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 if he is hardworking.
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, immigration has been possible by following
few
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a few
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guiddlines
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guidelines
 of developed countries.
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, any aspirant can give
English
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an English
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 test and apply for
student
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a student
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 or working visa in countries like America, Canada and so on. In my opinion, international boundaries are
opened
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but
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 inflation has been
sky rockting
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skyrocketing
 in the developed
nation
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nations
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. If we think practically, it is not easy for
fresher
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a fresher
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 to settle abroad. The market is very volatile. There is no
guarentee
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guarantee
 for
promising
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a promising
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 future. If anyone is thinking
to migrate
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of migrating
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,
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 me, after ten
years
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years,
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 the job market will become more stable. People will adopt new technology and
world
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the world
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 will behave in
prominent
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a prominent
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 way.
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, recent
time
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 has
advantage
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the advantage
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 of technological development. But unemployment and inflation are high.
Where as
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 in ancient
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time
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times
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,
economy
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the economy
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 was stable and people were living more peacefully and
enjoy
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enjoying
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 their
life
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lives
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.
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 me, ancient
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time
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times
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was
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were
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 more suitable for
livable
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a livable
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 condition

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly state your main idea in your introduction and summarize it in your conclusion. This helps to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. Try to develop those ideas further with examples or details.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words between sentences and paragraphs, such as 'however', 'for example', or 'moreover', to improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Be careful with spelling and grammar mistakes, as they can affect your clarity. For example, correct 'guiddlines' to 'guidelines' and 'guarentee' to 'guarantee'.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples or facts to support your ideas. This can make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
task achievement
You have introduced the topic well and shared different perspectives on living conditions.
task achievement
Your essay includes a good mix of ideas about the pros and cons of living today and in the past.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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