Some people think governments should spend money on measures to save languages with few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is a heated debate whether the
government
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should spend money on minority
languages
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. Some argue that governments should save
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with few speakers from dying out completely,
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others think
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is a waste of financial resources. I agree that
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government
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the government
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should spend money to save those
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. Language serves as a symbol of culture, which plays an important role in cultural diversity. Each language expresses a unique point of view
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the world. The disappearance of
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means the lifestyles of local
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would change and their cultures would be supplanted..
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various
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can enable
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to become more creative and improve cultural communication.
People
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can learn more
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about culture
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from other places, broaden their horizons. If the
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invests in minority
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, it can help to maintain
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knowledge and these customs.
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, only in
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way can the
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foster social cohesion, because everyone would show respect for linguistic diversity. Others argue that financial resources should not be spent on saving
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,
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would lead to less progress in societies. Those
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which used by few
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are backward may not
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enough nowadays. So that the fund should
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on the
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which a large number of individuals
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.
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think the
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should spend more money on more aspects that can
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,
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as investment in education. Through these aspects
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the quality of personal living.
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,
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some
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that
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seldom use are outdated, the issue of protecting
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cultural diversity is much more important. The protection of
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can form a harmonious society and maintain different cultures.

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