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the charts below give information about world spending and population

the charts below give information about world spending and population
The two given pie charts illustrate the distribution of data
global
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on global
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 spending and world inhabitants across different regions. As an
overall
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 perspective, in both
graph
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graphs
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 the number of items across different categories
are
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is
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 mixed. In the first chart,
other
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the other
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category
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 is
the
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apply
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bigger than food, clothing, housing and transport.
Also
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 in
second
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the second
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 one, the proportion of Asia is equal to the combined figures for Europe,
Americas
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the Americas
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, Africa and other
area
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areas
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.
According to
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 the first chart, the most significant amounts
prominent
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apply
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belong to the other
category
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 in the first chart,
while
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 Asia for
second
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the second
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 graph.
Furthermore
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, it is reported
other
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that other
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Use synonyms
category
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categories
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 with approximately one-quarter of global spending
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while
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, while
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 food and transport have
considerable
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a considerable
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 proportion versus housing and clothing. In
the
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apply
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other
word
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words
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, clothing with 6% has the lowest percentage of expenditure. In terms of comparison, Asia alone accounts for more than half of the total population, highlighting its significant dominance over other regions.
whereas
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, it is observed
Europe
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that Europe
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as
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has
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same
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the same
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as America percentages
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percentages as America
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.
Also
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, residents of Africa form a mere one-tenth. The other
category
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, with only 5%, has the smallest share of
world
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the world
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 population.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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