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The line graph gives information about the number of international conferences in three cities

The line graph gives information about the number of international conferences in three cities
The line graph illustrates the average of international meetings in three different
cities
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 from 1965 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of international conferences in
City
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C
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 showed greater growth,
while
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 both other
cities
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 showed some fluctuations over a forty-five-year period.
In addition
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,
city
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C
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 saw the biggest change in its figures In 1965, 35 international conference was held in
City
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 A, which was the highest among all
cities
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 in all years. Followed by 31 conferences were organised in capital B.
In contrast
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, there were no conferences in
City
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C
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 in that year. Over the next 35 years, the number of international arrangements that took place in
City
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C
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 sharply rose to peak around 28 records and
then
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 fell slightly before rising again to around 30 in 2010. The figures for the other
cities
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,
however
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, both witnessed some fluctuations throughout the period, both holding approximately 25 and 20 meetings , respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, city, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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