Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some argue that separating males and females
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different
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is better.
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, others believe the counterparts
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are
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more beneficial.
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is because
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separating
both
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genders
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will increase their desire to
study
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.
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, not separating them
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improves
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their communication
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. Splitting
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man
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men
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and
woman
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women
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to
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different
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will increase their desire to learn about
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the subjects
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that are offered in
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.
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is because they are not able to meet
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the opposite
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gender
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gender,
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that
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which
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may lead them to
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with them, which may shift their focus to
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thinking
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only about their partners.
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, many high school
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in the U.S. only focus on flirting with their partners because they do not separate them to different
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.
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reason, I believe that separating
both
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genders
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will increase their desire to
study
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. Others believe that putting them together in one institution will benefit their
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skill
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ability
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to communicate. Most
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students
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students,
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especially
boys
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boys,
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are scared to communicate with the opposite
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because they are
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. By mixing
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individual
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in
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one place, he or she are able to discuss topics
to
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with
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the opposite
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regarding a certain topic, which may improve their
skill
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to communicate with them.
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, most high school
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in Indonesia
that
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who
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attend
to
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schools
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that do not separate
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both
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the
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gender
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genders
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are very intelligent in speaking with everyone.
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,
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still believe that
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this
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can improve their
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to speak, it may
also
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lead
students
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to ignore their main purpose, which is to
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. In conclusion,
i
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believe separating
both
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genders
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into different
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are
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is
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great for them, because it can help them to focus more.
However
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,
although
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,
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apply
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mixing
both
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genders
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into one schooling may improve their
skill
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to discuss a certain topic with the opposite
gender
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, it may direct them to ignore their purpose to
study
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow by using linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand'.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your ideas.
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You presented both sides of the argument clearly.
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The conclusion summarized your opinion well.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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