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Band 2

With a growing population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there has been increasing debate about
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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your opinion on GM foods and how they relate to the problem of feeding the growing population.
task achievement
Make sure to support your arguments with clear examples. For example, discuss a specific benefit of GM foods in more detail.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay should be clear, with separate paragraphs for your introduction, arguments, and conclusion. Try to ensure that each paragraph has one main idea.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas and make your writing flow better. For example, use words like 'firstly', 'however', and 'in conclusion'.
task achievement
You have identified the relevance of GM foods to the issue of feeding a growing population, which is important to address in your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • genetically modified (GM) foods
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • crop yield
  • pest resistance
  • health concerns
  • environmental impact
  • ethics
  • organic farming
  • food waste reduction
  • agriculture technology
  • biotechnology
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