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The plan below shows the city before and how it looks now.

The two maps illustrate the transformation of a
city
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 centre between 1950 and the present time. The population has significantly increased from 20,000 to 200,000.
Overall
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, the
city
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 has experienced major development, with the addition of lakes, bridges, residential areas, and a dam. The infrastructure has expanded greatly to accommodate the growing population. In 1950, the
city
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 was relatively small, with a business district in the centre, surrounded by a few government buildings and residential areas. A river flowed through the west side, and a major road ran horizontally across the
city
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. There was only one airport located on the eastern edge. At present, the
city
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 has undergone significant changes. A large lake has replaced the central part of the
city
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, with two bridges built to cross it. The residential area has expanded both north and south of the
city
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. A dam was built on the eastern side of the lake,
while
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 the airport remained in the same location but appears to be larger. The business district has become denser and better connected with additional major roads.

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task achievement
Make sure to include a clear introduction that states the key changes between the two maps.
coherence and cohesion
Add more linking words to help the flow of your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Consider summing up the main points in a final statement to give a stronger conclusion.
task achievement
You have clearly described the main changes in the city over time.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your essay is logical, with a clear separation between past and present.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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