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There is construction taking place near your home and the noise is disturbing you. Write a letter to your local council. In the letter, Describe the construction Explain why the construction is a problem for you Say what you would like them to do about it

Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to express my concern about the construction which is happening
nearby
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 my house, and to be
honest
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 the noise is so annoying
me
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to me
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 nowadays. As I firmly believe that our hometown roads need repairs , there are numerous holes in between the roads
which
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 is
the
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another issue
of
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 my hometown.
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, that holes affected folks during the monsoon season as the
rain water
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 accumulates on the road. On the one side , I am preparing for the chartered accountant position, and my exams are held next week. Without any regret and
disattraction
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distraction
, I want to prepare for the examination
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 on the other
side
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, I do not think
so
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that I can follow my envisioned
time table
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 as there is
lot
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a lot
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 of disturbance
of
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 the machinery
equipments
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equipment
 in the days. I just wanted you to postpone the construction project for
few
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a few
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 days
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 will be very helpful for me to stay focused on the track . I hope the situation will be resolved soon
and
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 thank you for considering my concern. Yours
Faithfully
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, Rajpreet.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. For example, one paragraph for describing the construction, another for explaining the problem, and the last one for your request.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your sentences better. Use linking words like 'also', 'but', and 'therefore' to make your ideas flow more smoothly.
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Add more detail about the construction work itself. Describe what it is for and when it started to give better context for your concern.
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Keep a polite and formal tone in your request. Phrases like 'I kindly request' or 'I would appreciate' can make your letter sound more respectful.
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You clearly stated your concern about the noise from the construction.
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You explained how the noise is affecting your studies, which gives a personal touch to your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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