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The graph below shows the average hose prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the average hose prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the average
house
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prices
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 in three different countries—A, B, and C—over a 17-year period from 1997 to 2014.
Overall
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, all three countries started with relatively similar
house
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prices
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 in 1997, but by the end of the period,
country
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 A had the highest housing costs,
while
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country
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 C had the lowest. In
country
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 A, the average
house
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price
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 began at just under $220,000 in 1997. It rose steadily, reaching just over $500,000 by 2004. The following year, there was a slight drop to around $500,000, after which the
price
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 remained stable until 2008. From 2008 onwards, the
price
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 increased sharply, reaching $750,000 by 2014.
Country
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 B started at approximately $200,000 in 1997. The
price
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 rose gradually to $300,000 by 2004,
then
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 declined slightly to $250,000 in the following years.
However
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, from 2009, there was a significant increase, with
prices
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 doubling to $500,000, where they remained stable for the next five years until 2014. In
country
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 C,
house
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prices
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 were the lowest at the beginning, starting at about $170,000 in 1997. They increased gradually over the next seven years, reaching $250,000 in 2004.
However
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, by 2008,
prices
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 had fallen back to $170,000. After that, they rose again to $250,000 by 2009 and remained at
this
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 level for the rest of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words house, prices, country, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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