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the charts below giveinformation about world spending and popilation.

the charts below giveinformation about world spending and popilation.
The two given pie charts illustrate the distinction of data on global spending and world
inhabitants
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population
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 across different regions. As an
overall
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 perspective, in both
graphs
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graphs,
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 the number of items across different categories
are
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is
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 mixed. In the first
chart
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, the other category is bigger than food, clothing, housing and transport.
Also
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 in the second one, the proportion of Asia is almost equal to the combined figures for Europe,
Americas
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the Americas
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, Africa and other areas.
According to
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 the first
chart
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, the most significant amounts belong to the other category with approximately one-quarter,
while
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 clothing with 6%
consider
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is considered
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 as smallest portion. In
term
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terms
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 of combination in
second
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the second
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chart
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Asia
Punctuation problem
, Asia
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 alone accounts for more than half of the total population,
whereas
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the other
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other
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others
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just
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have just
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 with 5%
has
Verb problem
is
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 the lowest
place
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apply
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. Turning to the other point, in
first
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the first
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 pie
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chart
Punctuation problem
chart,
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 it is reported
housing
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that housing
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 approximately half of
food
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the food
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 is near a quarter.
Furthermore
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, transport is seen near a fifth.
On the other hand
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, it is observed
Europe
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that Europe
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 has the same percentages as America.
Likewise
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, residents of Africa form a mere one-tenth.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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