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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie chart shows that there is numerical data on the manufacture of passengers in 2015.
Overall
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, it is observed that seven different countries
produced
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 cars in the world. China had entered the largest market for car
production
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 among all of these countries.
In contrast
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, the Middle East was in the lowest position in
this
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 trend. In 2015, the
most
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largest
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 car
production
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 was
Greater
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 China, approximately 26% of the total. The second position was obtained by Europe, which is 25%.
This
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 percentage is very close to China.
Moreover
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, North America produced a significant amount of cars, estimated to be 19%. where
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 Japan and Korea were 16%.
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, the
production
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 of cars was not so noticeable in South Asia, South America and Middle East or Africa. In 2015, the ratio of car manufacturing in South Asia was 8%. It is interesting to note that South America and the Middle East or Africa secured the
last
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 position of
this
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production
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, which is 4% and 2% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • passenger cars
  • 2015
  • data
  • show
  • number
  • varied
  • countries
  • largest
  • producing
  • million
  • second
  • significantly
  • lower
  • production
  • lowest
  • made
  • interesting
  • note
  • difference
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