The pie charts show the spending habits of people in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the spending habits of people in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the spending habits of people in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The pie charts
provides
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provide
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information about the
reosons
Correct your spelling
reasons
where
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why
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people in
Use synonyms
UK
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the UK
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spending
Verb problem
had spending
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habits in
years
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the years
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1971 and 2001.
Overall
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,
In
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in
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2001 most significant
spends
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spending
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where
in
Change preposition
on
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cars
Use synonyms
,
while
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in
1971
Punctuation problem
1971,
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the most
thing
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significant thing
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where
Rephrase
apply
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people
spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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is
Verb problem
on was
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a
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apply
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food
Use synonyms
.
In addition
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,computers
are
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were
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not popular in 1971,but in 2001
this
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thing spends was considerably
rised
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apply
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,whilst the book consumers in 1971 was more
Linking Words
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than then
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then
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the
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computer owners,in 2001
computers owner
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computer owners
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was
being
Verb problem
apply
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more
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Change preposition
than then
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then
Use the right word
the
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book
likers
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lovers
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. Three biggest reosons where
UK
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citizens invest their money in 1971 was for
food
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,
cars
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and Petrols with 44%,22% and 10%,
However
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,in 2001 only petrols owners was gradually decreased from 10% to 8%,
cars
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and
food
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was stayed the most big need in
UK
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,
cars
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owner was rised in 21% since 1971,
while
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food
Use synonyms
likers was falled to 30%.
Third
Correct article usage
The third
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biggest
habit
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in
Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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in 2001 was
restourants
Correct your spelling
restaurants
with 12%.
Four
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For
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another different kind of
habit
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in 1971 was books,computers,furniture and
restourants
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restaurants
with 6%,2%,9% and 7%.
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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then
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1971,2001 have
another percentage
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other percentages
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of buyers in
this
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kind of
habit
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.
people
Fix capitalization
People
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who
want
Wrong verb form
wanted
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to buy a book in 2001
was
Verb problem
had
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considerably dropped
down
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apply
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from 6% in 1971 to 1% in 2001,
whereas
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computer buyers
was
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apply
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increased from 2%
to
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apply
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in 1971 to 12% in 2001.
two
Fix capitalization
Two
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other
Use synonyms
habit
Fix the agreement mistake
habits
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have about 5-7% changes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, cars, food, habit with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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