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the chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000,20250 and future projections for 2040. summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000,20250 and future projections for 2040. summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the
number
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 of three types of in Southland in 2000 ,2025 and projected for 2040.
Overall
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, there were
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significant increased
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increased
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 in numbers for international tourism
significantly
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apply
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over the years, and
expected
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an expected
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 gradual
raise
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rise
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 until
end
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the end
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 of 2040.
However
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, meat
produces
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production
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 had decreased end of 2025 and will continue decreasing
in
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by
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 2040. In spite of
dairy
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products
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had
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having
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 increased
at
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apply
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this
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 year
but
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, but
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 will decrease by 2040.
In addition
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,
this
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 year, the best
number
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 of exports is to
dairy
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products
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. In 2000, the
number
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 of international
tourism
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tourists
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 was over eight
billion
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pounds
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 and had kept
raise
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rising
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 to reach around nine
billion
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pounds
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 in 2025,
also
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 it is projected
rising
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to rise
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 to be low of ten
billion
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pounds
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 by 2040.
for
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For
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dairy
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products
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, it had grown between 2000 to 2025 from
least
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at least
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of
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apply
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seven to ten
billion
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pounds
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and
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, and
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 that
number
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 is the best
number
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 in
dairy
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products
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this
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 year. The slow dropping was for meat
products
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begin
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began
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 from six
billion
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pound
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pounds
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 and will
be continuing
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continue
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in dropped
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to drop
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 to reach five
billion
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pounds
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until
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by
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 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, dairy, products, billion, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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