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The table and chart show the total expenditure and average weekly spending by international students in four countries. The figures are in US dollars.

The table and chart show the total expenditure and average weekly spending by international students in four countries. The figures are in US dollars.
The table and chart provide a breakdown of the total annual
expenditure
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 and the average weekly amount spent by international
students
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while
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 studying abroad in four countries, with figures given in US dollars.
Overall
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,
students
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 in
Country
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 A had the highest total
expenditure
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,
while
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 those in
Country
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 D spent the least.
However
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, average weekly spending patterns varied, with some countries showing higher weekly costs despite lower annual totals, possibly
due to
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 differences in the duration of stay of types of expenses.
According to
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 data,
students
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 spent the most
overall
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, with a total
expenditure
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 of approximately $18,000 per year.
Country
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 B followed closely, with around $16,500.
In contrast
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,
Country
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 D recorded the lowest spending, totalling about $10,000 annually. In terms of average weekly spending, the table and chart show the total
expenditure
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 and average weekly spending by international
students
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 in four countries. The figures are in US dollars.
Country
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 B spent the most per week , approximately $400 , despite having a slightly lower total annual cost than
Country
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 A. In
Country
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 C ,
students
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 spent roughly $540 weekly,
while
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 those in
Country
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 A averaged $875.
Country
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 D had the lowest spending average of $435.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, students, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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