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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of car trips made by male and female drivers

The bar chart gives information about the percentage of car trips made by male and female drivers
The bar chart illustrates the average car travel used for eight different purposes by males and females in 2015.
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it is clear that
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 commuting to work was the most common reason for car trips for both males and females. Meanwhile, visiting town, going to the bank, running errands, visiting friends, and recreation were the reasons for driving that saw the biggest difference between the percentages by gender. By
men
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, about 52% had used a car to go to the company, which made up the highest percentage among all purposes. Followed by, there are 38% of
women
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 who travel to work.
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, slightly more
women
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 than
men
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 who driving for courses, around 12% and 8% respectively.
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, the proportion of
men
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 and
women
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 driving for shopping is around 17% and 10% respectively.
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, there are considerable differences of approximately 8% for visiting the town and recreation, with more
men
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 than
women
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.
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, cars were used for going to the bank, running errands, and visiting friends, approximately 4% of males and around 8% to 10% of females.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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