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The table and chart provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and chart provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table and bar chart illustrate the average weekly expenditure of international students in four countries, labelled A through D. The table outlines the
overall
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 financial outlay in US dollars,
while
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 the bar chart represents the
costs
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 of accommodation,
tuition
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 fees, and other daily expenses.
Overall
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, it is clear from the table and chart that the highest amount of money is spent in
country
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 A because the living and
tuition
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costs
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 are the highest among other countries,
while
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 the least money is spent in
country
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 D, as the
costs
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 are notably lower in comparison with other countries.
To begin
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 with, notably, in
country
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 A , students have spent a significant amount of money (875$) on
tuition
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 and general living expenses stand at $358 and $430, respectively,
while
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 the housing payments are the lowest component at $220.
Country
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 B shows similar
costs
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, though the
costs
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 are marginally lower for
tuition
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($280) and average living
costs
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 ($320);
however
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, students there pay more for accommodation ($280),
in contrast
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 to
Country
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 A.
In addition
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,
country
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 C demonstrates the most balanced
costs
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, $240 for an apartment, $250 for
tuition
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 and $275 for living.
Whereas
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,
country
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 D shows the least
costs
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 among all types of payments,
although
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 living
costs
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 there still surpass
tuition
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 and housing, reaching $235 compared to $225 and $220.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words costs, tuition, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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