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The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last forty years.

The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last forty years.
The bar chart illustrates the average
propotion
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proportion
 of
rainfall
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 in
a
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Australia for each month for the
privious
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previous
 year,
while
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 the line in the graph shows the average of the rain for each
months
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month
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 over the four decades.
Overall
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, the average of the
last
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 40 years is the highest for
a
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apply
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january
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January
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 and lowest in
a
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september
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September
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, according
line
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line,
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 it can be
conclude
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concluded
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 that from
april
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April
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 to
october
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October
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 is not
a
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monsoon time in
the
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Australia.
Firstly
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, the bar graph shows
rainfall
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 was
in
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at
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peak
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its peak
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 from
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january
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January
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 to
march
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March
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, where
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january
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January
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have
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has
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 around 70
mm
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,
february
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February
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 have just below 60
mm
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and
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, and
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march
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March
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have
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has
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 above 60
mm
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rain
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of rain
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,
while
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 the lowest
rainfall
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 was in
august
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August
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 and
october
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October
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 with around 5
mm
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.
Moreover
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, the
rainfall
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was
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increased in
november
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November
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 and
december
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December
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with
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by
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 about 50
mm
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.
Lastly
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, the line
the
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in the
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 graph depicts the average of
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last
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the last
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 four decades. The average shows the rain was at peak in
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january
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January
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 with above 80
mm
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, which fell in
april
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April
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 for 30
mm
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.
Furthermore
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, it was at
the
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its
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 lowest in
september
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September
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,
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;
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in contrast
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, it
is
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has
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 climbed
for
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over
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last
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the last
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 three months, for nearly 60
mm
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average
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apply
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in
a
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the
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last
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 month of the year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, january, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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