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Band 3.5

Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

Currently, there is much discussion with regard to online
information
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. It is argued that
libraries
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 are not necessary anymore. Nowadays,
internet
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the internet
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have
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has
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 a lot of
information
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 for students which can
easily
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be easily
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search
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accessed
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 more than in the past. I completely agree with that issue
thanks
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, thanks
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 to several reasons which will be clearly discussed in
following
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the following
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 paragraphs. Perhaps the most persuasive reason is that
libraries
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 are not available 24 hours, if someone
have
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has
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 to research during
night
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nighttime
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 time which
mean
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means
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 they cannot do it.
Secondly
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,
libraries
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 need an expenditure for
maintained
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maintaining
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quality
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the quality
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 and
healthy
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health
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 of the
book
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books
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.
Therefore
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, salaries for librarians who have to take care
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of librarian
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librarian
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librarians
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that
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who
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 use a lot of money. A good example of
this
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 is that the rural
libraries
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do have
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have not
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not have
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money
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enough money
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 for
maintained
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maintenance
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so
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, so
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people
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 in that place
are
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do
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 not use
it
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them
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.
Additionally
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, online
information
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are
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is
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 better. Nowadays, most
people
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 have
phone
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a phone
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 or
laptop
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a laptop
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 to
get in
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access
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 all the
information
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 that
located
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is located
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in
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on
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internet
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the internet
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. Meanwhile,
internet
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the internet
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do
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does
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 not have time
for
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to
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 open
so
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, so
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people
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 can do whatever they want.
Lastly
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, their questions are easier to solve
it
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apply
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because they do not have to select
type of the
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the type of
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 book for checking the answers.
However
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,
people
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 should make sure that all the quality of
information
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that
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they
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receiving
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receive
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are
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is of high
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 real
or
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and
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right
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accurate
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 because fake news and fake
information
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 are
a lot
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prevalent
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 in the present. Based on the considerations given above, assuming the classes are well taught, I totally agree
with
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that
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libraries
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 are not important anymore.

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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion and outlines your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better, such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
task response
Provide more detailed examples to support your points. This will help strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling carefully, as this can affect clarity.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is important.
task achievement
You mention the importance of verifying information online, which shows critical thinking.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible information
  • online databases
  • e-books
  • educational websites
  • community centers
  • physical books
  • literacy programs
  • peer-reviewed resources
  • misleading information
  • digital divide
  • high-speed internet
  • underprivileged communities
  • custodians of culture
  • archival material
  • conducive environment
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