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The table gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets.

The table gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets.
The pie chart illustrates the
proportion
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 of
carbohydrates
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,
protein
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 and fat in three
type
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types
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 of
diet
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:
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:
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 average
diet
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, healthy
diet
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 and healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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.
Overall
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, the healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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 contains
higher
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a higher
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 percentage of
carbohydrates
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 and
lowest
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the lowest
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 amount of fat,
while
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average
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the average
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diet
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including
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 the largest level of
protein
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.
Protein
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make
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makes
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 up 30% of the healthy
diet
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.
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 is 10% lower than the
proportion
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 of
protein
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 in an average
diet
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 and 5% more than the
proportion
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 of
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 for
sport
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.
On the other hand
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,
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of healthy
diet
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 to
sport
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 fats
are
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is
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 15%,
while
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 others stayed
same
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the same
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around
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, around
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 20%. In detail,
carbohydrates
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 make up 60% of the healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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, which is significantly higher than the 50% in a healthy
diet
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 and 40% in
average
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an average
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diet
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.
This
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suggest
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suggests
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carbohydrates
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 are the main source of energy for athletes.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, carbohydrates, protein, diet, sport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • carbohydrates
  • protein
  • fat
  • diet
  • nutrition
  • balanced diet
  • energy intake
  • high-protein
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • health effects
  • saturated fats
  • unsaturated fats
  • suitability
  • fitness goals
  • health conditions
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