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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.
The information specified in the line graph illustrates the changes in
number
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the number
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 of
thefts
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whom steal
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involving
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 thousands of cars across four different countries over a
nine- year
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nine-year
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 period from 1990 to 1999. At first glance, it is evident that there is an upward trend, with Sweden experiencing the second significant change,
while
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 Great Britain showed a fluctuation. As seen from the graph, Canada witnessed a stable decrease, falling from more than
a
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apply
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half
of
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five
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a
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 theft per
vehicles
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vehicle
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 to exactly five during
almost
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an almost
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 four-year period,
as well as
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,
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 France
which
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, which
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 saw a gradual
falling
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fall
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 from
near
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nearly
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 six
thefts
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.
On the other hand
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, Sweden exhibited a sharp increase, rising from just above 5 in 1990 to approximately 15
thefts
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 in 1999.
While
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,
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apply
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it is clear that
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 both Canada and France experienced neither upswing nor downtrend over six years from 1993-1999. Meanwhile, there is a fluctuation for Great Britain, peaking at 20
thefts
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 per
cars
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car
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thefts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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