The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider, the rich richer, the poor even poorer. What problems can the situation cause and give the solutions?

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gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider, the rich richer, the poor even poorer.

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problem is causing a lot of losses

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it can be fixed in many ways. To start with, when the rich is becoming richer

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might cause raising in prices and taxes,

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, rich people will buy more houses, apartments and buildings so they can rent it to others, and in

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case, the poor will only become less and less until they cannot pay rent, electricity bills and taxes, making them lose their homes and living on streets begging for food,

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problem will cause a lot of deaths.

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problem can be helped with opening more

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and making the rich invest in them, helping the poor get through the hard part of their lives

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, big companies can hire the homeless and the poorer people

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them earn wages that can give them a better life.

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Aug 4, 2025

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Make sure to clearly separate your ideas into paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.

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Provide more specific examples to support your points.

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Make the introduction stronger by clearly stating what you will discuss in the essay.

coherence and cohesion

Try to conclude with a clear summary of your main points.

task achievement

You identified a serious problem and suggested solutions, which is a good start.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

161 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

economic disparity
crime rates
wealth inequality
social segregation
education gap
affluent
mortality rates
uneven access
hopelessness
disenfranchisement
progressive taxation
redistribute
quality education
social programs
economic disadvantage
higher wages
entrepreneurship

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