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In many countries there is a shortage of suitable people for essential jobs. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measure could be taken solve?

In our contemporary life, major
concernhas
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concern has
 been paid to
shortage
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the shortage
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jobs
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of jobs
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 .Taking into consideration the significance of
shotage
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shortage
jobs
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 , I totally advocate the point of view that many
people
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 are
unemployment
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, it
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it
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which
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be
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can be
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 destroyed for the economy. Even though it has been proven that it has negative
causes
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consequences
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such
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, such
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 as low salaries and
lack
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a lack
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 of training .
the
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A
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 better
solve
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solution
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 could be taken increase salaries and improve
working
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the working
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 environment . The central discussion is that low salaries make many
people
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unemployment
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unemployed
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.
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 , lots of
people
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 do not
applay
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apply
 for
the
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apply
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suitable
jobs
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due to
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 the salary
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, it
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it
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which
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 dose not worth
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apply
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the effort
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. like
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like
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For
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 the
engineering
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, engineering
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 it us a hard job some
countries
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countries,
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paid
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they pay
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 a low salary .
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according to
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sevral
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several
researches
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research
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and
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studies and
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 social studies in the
last
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 few years in the Middle East ,
result
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results
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 have shown that the vast majority of individuals prefer
jobs
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that
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where
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 the salary
it
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apply
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is deserved .
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, it is certainly the case that low income
make
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creates
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shortage
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a shortage
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jobs
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of jobs
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. Moving on to another essential point
lack
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, lack
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training
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of training
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 , like some
jobs
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has
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have
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 lots of opportunities to catch up
but
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, but
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 many
people
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 do not have
the
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apply
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enough experience. To illustrate the argument , an obvious example is the case of KSA ,
there
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where
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are
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many
people
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 have no idea
for
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of
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 the
jobs
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 .
However
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, it has to increase free training programs .
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 , it is conclusively clear that
lack
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a lack
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training
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of training
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 causes unemployment..
To sum up
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, I totally believe that
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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 shortage
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jobs
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of jobs
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 will
be
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decrease the
economic
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economy
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 of the country. Seen in
this
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 light ,
i
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I
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recommended
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for
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that
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 adults
to
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get experience from the training programs .

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task achievement
Make sure to have clear ideas and reasons. Try to develop your points more fully.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow of your essay. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally'.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling to make your writing clearer and more professional.
task achievement
You have identified key issues such as low salaries and lack of training, which are relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your points well, which helps to give a clear ending to your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • shortage
  • suitable
  • essential jobs
  • causes
  • measures
  • education
  • skills
  • workers
  • migration
  • opportunities
  • rural areas
  • poor working conditions
  • low pay
  • attractive
  • potential
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