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The diagram below shows the states in the recycling of aluminum drinks cans. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the states in the recycling of aluminum drinks cans. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graph illustrates the
recycle
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recycling
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 process of
an
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apply
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aluminium
cans
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. The whole algorithm consists of
a
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four main stages that are cycled in a loop. The third part itself contains four sub-steps
in
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it
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. The process starts from collecting a future material and ends at a dealer point. The first stage is in the
center
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 of collection, where aluminium
cans
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 are sorted from
a
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plastic, paper or organic trash and after that are
send
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 to a recycling zone. At
this
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 moment of
a
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the
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 production,
cans
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 are cleaned, squished and
was
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are
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 ready for
a
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the
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 following manipulation. The third stage is a complex schema
,
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apply
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 that
a
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is a
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combination of
a
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apply
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four processes. At the
beginning
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cans
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 are melted down, after that
new
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, new
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 aluminium is rolled
to
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into
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 a thin sheet.
The next step is
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 when
cans
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 are created from previously done material. At
this
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point
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point,
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cans
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 are ready for exploitation, so they can be
send
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 to markets.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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