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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The aforementioned line graph illustrates the differences in
prices
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 of Copper, Nickel and Zinc throughout the
months
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 in 2014.
Overall
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, it is evident that there are many fluctuations in the graph. The first metal shown is Copper. The rise in price peaked in January, at 2% and reached a trough between May and
June
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, at approximately -1.5%. It
then
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 rose to 1% and remained constant for 3
months
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, between July and September. The second metal that can be seen is Nickel, which fluctuates the most. Between the first three
months
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, the price variations dropped rapidly by 5%, changing from 6% to 1%.
Then
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, for the next three
months
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, there were hardly any changes. The price change remained between 0.5% and 1%. After that, it rapidly plummeted to its lowest in
June
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, at -3%.
Moreover
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, between July to September, the
prices
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 were constant at -1%. In October,
prices
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 decreased again by -2%.
Finally
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, it plateaued for the remaining two
months
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, at 1%. The
last
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 metal that can be observed is Zinc. The
prices
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 reached their highest point in February, at 3% and dropped to their lowest point in
June
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 and October, at -1%.
Furthermore
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, it can be seen that
prices
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 dropped between February and
June
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,
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 by around 4%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, months, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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