Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is often thought that
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between
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at
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, school, and in daily life is a useful thing,
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believe that we should try to improve our teamwork abilities.
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the latter opinion can be beneficial in some cases, I believe that
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between
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can increase their productivity and their excitement. Cooperation is important to finish some
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that requires teamwork skills, especially in big companies, in order to finish
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as soon as possible. As an illustration, Big 4 companies,
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as Deloitte, focus on improving cooperative skills for their employees, so that they can be faster and more effective
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doing their
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. I think that
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is more important to increase productivity, because
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can make
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more excited to be better than others, so they become hardworking
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.
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, it
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makes workers reject losing and try to beat everything in front of them. In conclusion,
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cooperation is so useful to finish
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fast, I think that
competition
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is more effective on
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and increases their productivity.

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Your introduction presents the topic well and states your opinion clearly.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • excel
  • outperform
  • advancements
  • academic standards
  • work ethic
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • unhealthy rivalries
  • harmonious
  • supportive
  • collaborative learning
  • social skills
  • communication skills
  • sense of community
  • collective goals
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