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Writing Samples
Band 5

There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. Write a letter to a local newspaper. In your letter: ointroduce yourself odescribe the importance of the park osay what action you will take if the council continues with its plan

Dear Sir/Madam, I hope my letter finds you well. My name is Kajalpreet and I am
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 resident of Rose society, living there
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last
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 20 years. I always enjoyed staying in my locality, because of
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peacful
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peaceful
 and natural surroundings
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 where our community park plays a vital role. I felt distressed
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 when I read about the Municipality's decision
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 public garden. It is an exercise ground
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 many old populations,
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 area for
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 mini parties and
playground
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 children. I have
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 that all the people in our area try their best to keep
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 place neat and clean. I would like to request you from the core of my heart
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not to sell our social playground. I would really appreciate it
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 consider my appeal.
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, if you still
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 to stick with your decision, unfortunately, I have to approach higher authorities for
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help because your decision is completely unjustified.
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, I will gather all the prestige members of our society to take
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 steps to stop
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 action. I am looking forward to your positive response
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 Yours
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, Kajalpreet

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one clear idea.
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Include a more formal closing statement.
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Express your feelings with clear and strong words.
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You have a clear introduction.
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You used a polite and kind tone throughout the letter.
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Your letter shows your concern for the community.
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