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Band 6.5

The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart
illustrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
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 key information about
three
Correct article usage
the three
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 types of junk food
has
Verb problem
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consumed by the United
Kingdoms
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Kingdom
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 in the time 70s to 90s. The units are measured in number per week.
Overall
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, fish and chips consumers have increased significantly.
As well as
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,
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apply
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 to the
hamburgers
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hamburger
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 customer with a slight up and
downs
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down
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.
Whereas
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,
to
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the pizza consumers have declined slightly.
According to
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 what is shown, the chips and fish
has
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have
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 a gradual surge
began
Wrong verb form
beginning
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 with almost 100, and
ends
Wrong verb form
ending
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 with 500. Which
,
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 is the top rank in 1990, among the other types.
Additionally
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,
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
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 prefer pork burgers in the
1970
Correct your spelling
1970s
, almost zero but went upward until
1980
Punctuation problem
1980,
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then
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 remained steady
to
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until
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 1985,
then
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shown
Wrong verb form
showed
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 a significant
increased
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increase
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at
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in
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 1990 with almost 300. In terms of pizza purchases, the beginning period was the highest compared to the
another
Fix the agreement mistake
other
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 types, with nearly
over
Rephrase
apply
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300.
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then
Fix capitalization
Then
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 went downward the next three years to the 85s,
then
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 has not changed
to
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in
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 the
last
Linking Words
 period with a percentage below 200. which is the least number among burgers,
as well as
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to
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among
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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pizze
Correct your spelling
pizza
 customers.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fast food
  • UK
  • 1970
  • 1990
  • increase
  • stable
  • hover
  • peak
  • popularity
  • double
  • comparison
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