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The chart below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The data
is providing
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provides
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 details on the ages of the people of two countries for
year
Correct article usage
the year
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 2000 and the future changes expected in
this
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 data by 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Yemen
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 had young children making up its population,
while
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 adults proportion is projected to
more
Verb problem
be more
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 than half
in
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by
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 2000. Italian adults are currently the majority
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 it is forecasted that all age groups will fall below half of the percentage. In 2000, just over half of
Yemeni
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Yemenis
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 were under 14, compared to a little above 14% of Italians of the same age. Only a very small percentage of people in
Yemen
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 were above 60
at
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, at
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 36%,
in contrast
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 to nearly a quarter of the Italians. The largest portion for Italy was the 15-59 year olds with 61.6%
while
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Yemen
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 recorded 46.3% in
this
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 category.
Yemen
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's average age is set to increase
with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 the portion of 60 years slightly rising to 5.7% and the
middle aged
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middle-aged
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 citizens moving up by 11%, leaving the youngest group with a decrease of nearly 13%. It is envisaged that by 2050, the number of Italians over 60 will jump up to 42.3%, the percentage of those in the youngest bracket will drop down to 11.5% and the share in the middle category will decline to 46.2%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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