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Band 4.5

"There are more challenges and risks than benefits to new technology."

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technology
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have
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 been invested in order to bring a wide range of positive
benefit
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benefits
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 in societal progress.
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, there is controversy whether technological tools have more severe
challengs
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challenges
 than incredible opportunities. I completely believe the
technology
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 offers
the
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advantages more
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more advantages
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 than risks,
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their
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its
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 clear upsides.
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 with, technological development profoundly supports education.
Firstly
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, students from different countries can access the massive knowledge and culture more and more
convenient
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conveniently
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 with a click on a website on the internet.
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, teachers take
advantages
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advantage
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 of advanced equipment to transfer updated information, which teenagers can
absort
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absorb
 correct lessons at the time.
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,
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, children still studied their curriculum depending on a smartphone or a laptop when
the
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Covid-19
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COVID-19
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 happened and impacted
in
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the world. Thereby, new
technology
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play
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 a vital role in promoting education.
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, high
techonology
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technology
 recycles and treats the pollutants, which are profit-driven activities
such
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 as mining and
impoper
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improper
 waste disposal
contributing
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 to vast ecological degradation in the past. Scientists and engineers have been investing
a
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range of
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technology
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technologies
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such
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 as carbon capture technologies, oncean cleanup technologies, waste water treatment, leading to
clean
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the waste and
landfill
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landfills
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 from
manufacturings
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manufacturing
 and households.
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, they have limited the chemical pollutants and the fossil fuel emissions affecting the natural environment and human
well-beings
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well-being
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. Hopefully, by the next 50 years, advanced facilities will have been washing toxic ingredients and less
pollutions
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pollution
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. In a nutshell,
high
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 advanced
technology
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 not only
help
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helps
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human
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humans
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 create
friendly
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a friendly
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 environment, but
aslo
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also
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border
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 of knowledge in society. Researchers are trying to derive the beneficial real,
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 they are minimising the challenging matter of advanced tools.

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introduction
Make sure your introduction clearly states your position and presents the main points you will discuss.
coherence
Try to arrange your ideas in a clear order. Each paragraph should focus on one main point.
task achievement
Use more examples to support your points and explain them clearly.
opinion
You have a clear opinion about technology offering more benefits than risks.
examples
You provide examples of technology in education and environmental care, which are relevant points.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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