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The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates how
an
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electricity
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 is produced from a particular type of coal, through
lots of
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many
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 stages.
Overall
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, there are four main stages
,
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that
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in
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one
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which one
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 type of coal is produced an
electricity
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to
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for
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 facilities, starting with mining and finishing with providing
electricity
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 to industrial areas.
To begin
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 with,
a
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coal is mined,
then
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 it is crushed
to
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into
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 small
shapes from
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pieces
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 a special equipment. After that, crushed coal is delivered to
gasifier
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the gasifier
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 building by trucks. In building, coal is heated by high temperature, after which it is turned
to
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into
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gas
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,
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 by adding some substances. The next main step is cooling, which
is occurred
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occurs
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 in
cooling
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a cooling
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 factory. In
this
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 process, extracted
gas
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 is generated in two
things
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ways
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, first for cleaning, whilst the
next one
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other
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 is wasted
gas
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. Next phase is cleaned coal, delivered to
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gas
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a gas
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 power plant, where it is
utilized
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utilised
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 as an energy resource
and
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, and
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 waste
hear
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heat
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 is
also
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undertaken
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generated
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 at the same time.
Finally
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,
electricity
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 is sent to different locations,
such
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 as apartments and electrical stations.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Coal mining
  • Open-pit mining
  • Transportation logistics
  • Power plant
  • Pulverized coal
  • Combustion
  • Boiler
  • Steam generation
  • Turbines
  • Kinetic energy
  • Electrical energy
  • Generator
  • Cooling and condensing
  • Recycling
  • Electricity transmission
  • National grid
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