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The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.Summarize the information by selecting an reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.(phuong)

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.Summarize the information by selecting an reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.(phuong)
The table displays the percentages of
student
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students
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 present in specialist, grammar, voluntary-controlled and community schools from the year 2000 to 2009.
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, the majority of the
schools
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schools'
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 attendance decreased over the years,
while
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 students attending the community college increased
drammatically
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dramatically
 over the period given. It was shown in the table that the pupils attending specialist
school
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schools
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was
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 12% in 2000 and decreased insignificantly over the period,
whereas
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 the
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number
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 of grammar school
student
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students
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 doubled at the beginning of the year and dropped steadily to 12% in 2009.
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, the
preesence
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presence
 of
schoolchild
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schoolchildren
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 in voluntary-controlled
college
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colleges
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 was the highest in proportion at the start of the session, and continued to fall significantly to 38% and 20% in the
year
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years
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 2005 and 2009, respectively.
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, the percentage of
schoolchild
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schoolchildren
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 in community
academy
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academies
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 was 12 in 2000
which
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 is equal to the
attendace
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attendance
 in specialist
school
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schools
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but
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 continued to rise consistently to 32% in 2005 and 58% in 2009.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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