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The number of houses built per decade in the towns of farkletown and Newton over the last century.

The shown bar chart illustrates the changes
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construction of
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 houses per decade in the towns of Farkletown and
Newtown
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 over a period of 90 years in the 20th century between 1900 and 1990. As the graph shows, both the data of
Newtown
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 and Farkletown witnessed an upward trend, but
these
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the
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number
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 of
Newtown
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 has
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dropped suddenly.
While
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 the
number
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 of houses in Farkletown was highest in 199 It is clear from the graph
Flankletown houses that
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that Flankletown houses
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 saw a slight increase from 1900 to 1910 about
over
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40 to more than 60,
then
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 dropped significantly
around
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by around
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 20 units in the following year. In terms of
this
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 figure
from
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, from
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 1920 to 1950 experienced a quick jump from over 20 to 80, before it decreased rapidly
at
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by
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 approximately 10 units in 1960. After
that
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that,
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 it went up
considerable
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considerably
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 in the next year
about
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by
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 more than 200,
then
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 it continued
go
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to go
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 down substantially to near the
number
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 20 in 1980. And it grew suddenly to over 260
which
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, which
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 impressive
number
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 in 1990. Regarding
,
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 the
number
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 of
Newtown
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 stood at 40
then
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rised
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rose
 slightly to over 150 between 1900 and 1930, before
leveled
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levelling
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 off
during
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over a 3-year
from
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period from
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 1940 to 1960 at approximately 120. There
are
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was
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 a slow fall in 1970
about
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of
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near
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nearly
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 190 units,
then
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 it continued
climb
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to climb
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fast
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rapidly
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 in the following years to 1990.

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Make a short start line that tell what the chart shows. Then make a clear plan for what you will say.
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Use simple link words to show flow. Use words like first, then, next, and finally.
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Check the data from the chart. Keep town names the same and use the same set of numbers.
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Add a short ending to sum up what the chart shows.
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Keep words simple and check for spelling mistakes and stray words.
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The writer tries to give numbers from the chart.
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There is some attempt to show how the numbers change over time.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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