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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph illustrates the amount of expenditure on travelling in ten different nations during the year 2014, expressed in USD.
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although
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 China's spending eclipsed that of all other countries, reaching the forefront with approximately 110
billion
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 on travelling, the United States and Germany followed closely behind, accounting for the second and third positions, each with 85
billion
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Next,
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even though a little more than half of China's expenditure was seen in the United Kingdom at around 55.000 million, less than half of the latter was recorded in Singapore, at around 25.000 million.
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, the smallest outlay on tourism was documented by Taiwan, with only about 10.000 million. Following that,
while
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 Malaysia and India had the lowest expenditure above that of Taiwan, with roughly 16 and 18
billion
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, respectively, Hong Kong and South Korea were not far from
this
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, with each close to 20
billion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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