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The bar chart depicts the amount of water usage in 5 different countries while the table shows the cost of it

The bar chart depicts the amount of water usage in 5 different countries while the table shows the cost of it
The
bar
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chart
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 depicts the
amount
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 of
water
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usage
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 in 5 different countries
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while
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, while
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 the table shows the
cost
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 of it.
Overall
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, the US was the
country
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consumed
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that consumed
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 the largest
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liters
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litres
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 of
water
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 with the smallest expenses.
France
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 was the
country
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 with the highest
cost
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 of
water
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. From the
bar
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chart
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, it can be seen that
Germany
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 consumed the least
amount
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 of
water
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with
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, with
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 more than 200
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liters
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litres
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.
In contrast
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, the US’s
water
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usage
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 was the highest
reaching
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, reaching
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 more than 350
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liters
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litres
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. Domestic consumers in
Canada
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, Italy and
France
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 used about 330, 300 and 250
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liters
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litres
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respectively
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, respectively
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. It is notable that
France
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 charged the highest with the
cost
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 of
water
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 at 2.1 US
dollars
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 per
m3
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m3,
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while
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 the US residents paid only 0.01 US
dollars
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 per m3.
Germany
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 was the
country
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 setting the
second highest
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second-highest
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 expense for
water
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 at 2.1.
Canada
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 and Italy were way
more
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apply
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lower at 0.31 and 0.7, respectively. The
bar
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chart
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 depicts the
amount
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 of
water
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usage
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 in 5 different countries
Linking Words
while
Punctuation problem
, while
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 the table shows the
cost
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 of it.
Overall
Linking Words
, the US was the
country
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consumed
Correct pronoun usage
that consumed
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 the largest
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liters
Use the right word
litres
show examples
 of
water
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 with the smallest expenses.
France
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 was the
country
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 with the highest
cost
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 of
water
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. From the
bar
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chart
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, it can be seen that
Germany
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 consumed the least
amount
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 of
water
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with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 more than 200
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liters
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litres
show examples
.
In contrast
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, the US’s
water
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usage
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 was the highest
reaching
Punctuation problem
, reaching
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 more than 350
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liters
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litres
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. Domestic consumers in
Canada
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, Italy and
France
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 used about 330, 300 and 250
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liters
Use the right word
litres
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respectively
Punctuation problem
, respectively
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. It is notable that
France
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 charged the highest with the
cost
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 of
water
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 at 2.1 US
dollars
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 per
m3
Punctuation problem
m3,
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while
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 the US residents paid only 0.01 US
dollars
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 per m3.
Germany
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 was the
country
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 setting the
second highest
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second-highest
show examples
 expense for
water
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 at 2.1.
Canada
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 and Italy were way
more
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apply
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lower at 0.31 and 0.7, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, overall, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the eighth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, chart, amount, water, usage, cost, country, liters, france, germany, canada, dollars, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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