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The‎ ‎chart‎ ‎below‎ ‎give‎ ‎information‎ ‎on‎ ‎the‎ ‎consumption‎ ‎of‎ ‎water‎ ‎by‎ ‎agricultural‎ ‎products‎ ‎in‎ ‎Australia‎ ‎in‎ ‎‎2‎‎0‎‎1‎‎4‎‎,‎‎ ‎and‎ ‎the‎ ‎share‎ ‎of‎ ‎income‎ ‎they‎ ‎produced‎.‎

The‎ ‎chart‎ ‎below‎ ‎give‎ ‎information‎ ‎on‎ ‎the‎ ‎consumption‎ ‎of‎ ‎water‎ ‎by‎ ‎agricultural‎ ‎products‎ ‎in‎ ‎Australia‎ ‎in‎ ‎‎2‎‎0‎‎1‎‎4‎‎,‎‎ ‎and‎ ‎the‎ ‎share‎ ‎of‎ ‎income‎ ‎they‎ ‎produced‎.‎
The pie graphs provide key information about the
water
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concume
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consumption
 on the farm goods, and the
income
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 production,
In
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in
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 Australia
proportion
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. The units are measured by percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that the livestock is taking more than it
get
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, it
is represent
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represents
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 over
the
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a
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 third
in
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of
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 the
water
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 consumption.
Whereas
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, fruits are consumed less than a quarter, but support the
income
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 with the highest number among the other.
According to
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 the chart, the livestock
which
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 is considered the top rank among the other types, with 36%, but
the
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the outcome is low with 5%. compared to
fruits
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fruit
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 production,
were
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they were
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 consumed
21
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at 21
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%
,
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 and 36%, respectively.
Nevertheless
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, Milk products
are consuming
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consume
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 19% of
water
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, and
produced
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produce
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 exactly 21%. In terms of
the
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Rice
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Rice,
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 it
is
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apply
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only
need
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needs
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 5% of
water
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, and
contribute
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contributes
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with
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apply
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19%
in
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to
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 the
income
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. Unlike
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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sugar it is the same amount takes 10% of
water
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, and gives 10%
income
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 generation,
as well as
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 the other
agriculture
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agricultural
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 goods consume 9%, and the
income
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 is the same with 9%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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