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In some sountries owing a home rather then renting one is very important for people. Why might be this case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

There is an ongoing debate about
some
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whether some
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 nations think renting
apartment
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an apartment
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 is
mush
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much
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 better than
owing
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owning
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 a house. There
is
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are
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 a lot of
factor
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factors
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 leading to
this
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,
such
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 as the tax cost, and they are not making enough money. I strongly believe the renting option is not
the
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a
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 viable thing to do.
To begin
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 with, nawadays the resident unit are increasingly demand, especially in the major cities,
therefore
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 with the low
income
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 they can it afford to buy a house, with higher
income
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 tax, and low salaries, they can think at all to look for a
home
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, so states should be held accountable on
this
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 to find a solution for
this
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. Maybe they try to reduce the tax for the
low
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low-income
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income
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 portion.
For instance
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, a recent study has shown
the
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that the
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 vast majority of people
tennd
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tend
 to live
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in an
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an
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a
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rential
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rental
 apartment, are the poor
income
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, with at
leat
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least
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 5000$
,
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apply
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 per month.
Nevertheless
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,
this
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 way of living
it
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apply
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is not good, because if citizens want to make a
family
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family,
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they
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it
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 would be hard for them
,
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. In
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in other
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words
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words,
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 if a person
want
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wants
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 to get
marry
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married
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 and bring a child
to
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into
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this
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 life, he needs to bigger space
and
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, and
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 that will cost him a lot.
Therefore
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, he needs
owing
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to own
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 a
home
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 for him and his family
happiens
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happiness
.
For example
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, many people
that
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who
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 want to
gets marry they
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get married
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 work hard first to
baught
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buy
 a
hause
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house
, before
metting
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meeting
 the girl, but now they can not marry,
due to
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 the
expensis
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expenses
 of
owing
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owning
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 a
home
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. In conclusion,
although
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 some citizens
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apply
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are prefer
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prefer
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 to stay in a
rential
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rental
 apartment. On balance,
i
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I
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 consider it is not
great
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a great
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 idea for the person who
want
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wants
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 to make a family, and for the poverty
income
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 population. For recommendation, governments should
bann
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ban
 any company that
have
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has
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 lower salaries, and try to
provides
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provide
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 a
sheap
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cheap
home
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 as support for the workers
that
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who
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 contribute
in
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to
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 the workforce
income
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.

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task
Say your view at the start and stick to it. Explain why you think owning or renting is better or worse.
structure
Make ideas fit the question. Keep one idea per sentence and link them with easy words like and, but, also, because.
grammar
Use simple spell and simple form. Check words like there, their, to, too, and use correct tense.
content
Give one or two examples that fit the idea and are easy to repeat.
structure
End with a short end that restates your view.
stance
The writer shows a clear aim to argue against renting.
content
The writer points a real problem of money in a common way.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • own
  • rent
  • home
  • house
  • buy
  • save
  • saving
  • future
  • family
  • kids
  • school
  • security
  • stability
  • debt
  • loan
  • cost
  • price
  • rise
  • mobility
  • move
  • benefit
  • risk
  • positive
  • negative
  • policy
  • government
  • tax
  • income
  • job
  • culture
  • status
  • wealth
  • home ownership
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