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Writing Samples
Band 3

Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, it has been universally believed that
environmental
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environmentalism
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 has long been gaining popularity at an incredible rate. Some people state that
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the environmental
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environmental
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environment
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 brings the world many benefits,
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 many others argue that its drawbacks should not be ignored, as the effects of
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 matter could influence everyone's life.
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 essay will discuss the topic mentioned above, giving some reasons why
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 has occurred and examining the consequences of
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 worrying trend. Those who oppose environmental
claim
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claims
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 that, over the
last
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 decade, there has been a prolific increase in the number of instances of environmental
leading
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factors leading
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 to illnesses and diseases. Another main and serious issue is time and money.
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, the solution to the problems mentioned above is far-reaching. Meanwhile,
environment
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environmentalists
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 claim that
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the environmental
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environmental
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environment
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 brings significant benefits to a country since it plays a very useful role in the field of environment in general, enriching people's knowledge and giving them the freedom to take action on anything they believe is correct for the country or state.
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,
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the environmentalhas
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environmentalhas
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environment has
 many positive aspects, not only for individuals and families but
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 for the whole society; students can do research using online resources
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Finally
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,
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the environmental
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environmental
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environment
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 has many advantages, playing a crucial role
improving
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in improving
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 many sectors in the state or country.
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, it pushes the stability of the whole world forward. In conclusion,
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 both sides of the argument have their merits.
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, everything in life has pros and cons.
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, people should determine which way to choose.

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task response
State your clear view on the topic in the first paragraph and answer the question directly.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences in each paragraph to show one main idea.
content
Add 2 or 3 well supported points with simple examples, not just talks.
lexical
Fix word choice and avoid repeating 'environmental'; use 'environment' or 'environmental problems' correctly.
coherence
Use plain linking words to show flow, like 'but', 'also', 'for example'.
grammar
Check grammar and punctuation, fix long sentences and verb form.
balance
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both sides.
structure
There is some use of linking words to guide the reader.
content
A global issue is mentioned, which is a good topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collective action
  • climate change
  • rising sea levels
  • extreme weather events
  • biodiversity loss
  • ecosystems
  • Convention on Biological Diversity
  • significant improvements
  • sovereignty
  • environmental policies
  • international collaboration
  • environmental degradation
  • shared responsibility
  • technological advances
  • innovative solutions
  • international cooperation
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